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1. I will not tell you
you are pretty.

How can the halls and angles of such honest humanity
be so pinched between sounds as elementary as these?

2. You need not be two stringent boughs of                     syllables
nor weave your viney bones abreast these five petty        letters,
whirling in the fire of the river
Styx.
Do not attempt to peel yourself layer for layer,
leaving all the disgust behind.
Do not tally your body six                                                lines
too short, hemming the holes into
puckers red as those volcanoes of                                    strength
bursting at the base of your hips.

3. Blood is not satisfaction.
Blood is not patience, waiting for the rooms to empty      and the faucet
to coat and cover the silence.
Blood is red cells breathing and white soldiers fighting
and platelets healing,
tugging sleeves back to illuminate the signs.
It is not weakness nor relapse nor short-sightedness
beleaguered within a tarnished state of mind.
It is life peaking up through the concrete,
like a(n) (in)carnation breaching the vine.

4. Tell yourself recovery is more than a pipe dream.
Tell yourself ribs are the trophies of the emaciated masses
and the blatantly dying; collarbones the handles on reality
that will eventually snap.
Tell yourself you are separate;
you are alive.

You are not dying unless you relinquish your body to the jackals,
refusing freedom even as it is spooned before you,
not running but allowing yourself to be dragged, toe first,
straight into the fire. You are not burning unless you
forget how to feel the flame.

5. Fight back, even against me.
Fight for the choice.
Because you are not dying unless you lay your hands down,
and even then
I will lay my bones down beside yours,
whisper

Jess.


I have seen the things you have seen
and


6. I will not tell you
you are pretty.

7. I will tell you to fight your way back to just barely breathing
and then a little beyond sleepy and a fraction beneath sick. Linger
if you must, but fight for the centimeter
and the ounce
and the word(s).


I will take those words,
package them, send them, bless them with crooked handwriting.

I will remind you
8. "you are
pretty                      intelligent
pretty                      creative
pretty                      amazing"


But you will never be, merely,
pretty.
For Jess (*AlloenDreams) and anyone else this disorder has ever, even once, touched.
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Daily Deviation

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on watching the night close its eyes on you by ~sense-and-stupidity inspires me again and again as both a writer and more importantly, a person says the suggester. Suggested by many others. ( Suggested by AlloenDreams and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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AlloenDreams Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2014
the days have been hard lately, and i hope you know i read this on the hardest of them

i miss you, and i wish i could articulate just how much. 
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Tiny-Chuck Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2013  Student Writer
This is so beautiful, I am absolutely wonderstruck. Just wow. This is fantastic, well done :heart:
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello, I wanted to let you know I've used your lovely title in my newest Title Poem, 'your teeth leave different scars'. If you wanted to read it, the link is [link] - but this comment is really just to let you know how I've made use of your gorgeous title. :)
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KaitlynnRenee Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013
Anyone who reads this will interpret it in a different way. It's the flow of the words, the vibe.
Thank you for posting, I love to play with my mood.
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ryanisnasty Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013
Congratulations on the well deserved DD!
:huggle:
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:iconcamelopardalisinblue:
camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. Thank you, thank you, thank you.

Congratulations on your DD, and just... yeah. Thank you. I wasn't even the one this is meant for and I just can't... yeah. Sometimes I am eloquent, but at the moment I am merely speechless.
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bRoKeNgRiN Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Absolutely stunning. Fantastic piece of writing. I'm sure I'll be able to read this many times and always glean something new, find something I hadn't seen. Thank you very much for sharing.
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LostInTheMorning Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so moving. It gave me chills.
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Serena-666 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Student General Artist
Oh my god. This is so amazing! ^_^ truly a well written piece.
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:iconalabaster-islie:
alabaster-Islie Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
this sickness breathed out
life
and breathed in
death
it cast its cold shadow
across young (impressionable) minds
and it takes lives
in the thousands
~silent somebody~
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sense-and-stupidity Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Student Writer
that's beautiful.
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:iconalabaster-islie:
alabaster-Islie Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013
just breath in
and out
and all will be
fine
the world hasnt ended yet
we can still move on
~silent somebody~
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SolarumNyx Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i cannot express my emotions at this piece, it is wonderfully written and intensely powerful.

i'm truly at a loss for words. <3

as some others have commented, breath-taking.
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:iconkhlor:
Khlor Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
Eating disorder? I can relate...this poem is a spectacle in itself...just the stark emotions you encompassed in few words. Breath-taking.
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Wanderlings Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
beautiful. brilliant. well done :heart:
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:iconbeiowulf:
Beiowulf Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist
This is truly beautiful. Thank you for writing this; the DD is well-deserved.
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This. Is. Stunning. I felt like section 1 was written specifically for me.

In addition: the quote from Katie Makkai - EFFING YES I LOVE THAT POEM
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sense-and-stupidity Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Student Writer
:) I was waiting for someone to pick up on that. I feel bad that I used the quote...but I figure, at least I quoted her. xD
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It is indeed in quotation marks ;) *I* think you should link to a video of it in your artist's comments, so other people can discover her, too. :)
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sense-and-stupidity Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Student Writer
I always meant to, but never got around to it. I'll do it today. :)
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Karinta Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you. It's beautiful. It touched me, for sure.
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:iconabbymeyer:
AbbyMeyer Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
That was... brilliant. :')
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013   General Artist
so happy to see this get the recognition it deserves! :love:
congratulations on the DD, dolly. :heart:
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:iconalloendreams:
AlloenDreams Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013
i love you sweetheart :heart:

i hope you're well, and i hope this made you smile.
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Daghrgenzeen Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well-deserved DD!
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ImagineAppleScruffs Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow! Intense! And pretty cool! That was such a nice thing you did for your friend; supporting her through her crisis and/or crises is just about the best thing you can do for her. To always be there should she need you. :nod:
I wish I could be this creative when it comes to supporting the people I love. :)

And a big congrats on the DD! :clap: The thought behind this poem alone is enough to get the DD, never mind the awesome poetry skills! :D

:peace:
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Indigo-Serenade Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so expressive... a simply beautiful poem.
Grats on the DD; it's completely well-deserved! :squee: :heart:
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the DD! :)
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That brought a slight tear to my eye because it reminds me of myself ten years ago. Very well done. Love the organization, the build up of tense and tone to the quiet reminder at the end. :+favlove:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012   General Artist
This. :faint:

Congratulations on a well deserved DLD, Jess! :huggle:
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sense-and-stupidity Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Student Writer
Umm...my name isn't Jess, but thanks. :)
Jess is who I wrote it for.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012   General Artist
I know. I accidentally mistook you for *AlloenDreams :blush:
To me you are both such stunning writers and inspirations, truly so. :love:
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sense-and-stupidity Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Student Writer
haha Well, I'm flattered I was mistaken for such an amazing, beautiful writer as her.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012   General Artist
You are pretty gorgeously amazing yourself, sweetie <3
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sense-and-stupidity Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student Writer
-blush- Thankies.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012   General Artist
Anytime:heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012   General Artist
Oops, I can't believe I just mixed you guys up! :blush:
You are both so wonderful as writers and are beautiful souls, truly so. :love:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link]
Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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sense-and-stupidity Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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dark-harou Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing. There...are no words to even begin to express just HOW amazing I think it is. Well written, with lots and lots of love, I can really feel how much you love your friend. I really hope things go well with her recovery. :heart:
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Ixi-Nox Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Student Digital Artist
This is gorgeous and oh so eloquent. What's most touching is that it resonates with personal experience, and it's clear that this was written with first hand knowledge. I think you're very strong, for taking such an awful disorder and turning it into something so beautiful to read.

I keep reading this over and over, it's just so gorgeous. <3
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AlloenDreams Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012
sweetheart. sweetheart, sweetheart, sweetheart. there are no words. i just, this is the most beautiful group of words i have ever read. i love you, i love you so much. i wish i could say more, but can only sit here, amazed and crying.

i hope, that if you ever doubt you are even a fraction less beautiful than you have been told you are, you can look back on this. this is true, raw beauty -as are you.
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sense-and-stupidity Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Student Writer
I just wanted you to know that I believe fully in you, and that I'm here for you, and that you are beautiful. I love you so much Jess. Stay safe.
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arabesque-o Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Student Photographer


wow.
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sense-and-stupidity Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Student Writer
:)
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